The Ridiculously Successful Way to Introduce Yourself Over Email

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Writing an email to a stranger is easy. Writing an email to a stranger that gets a response? Not so easy. The typical professional gets so many messages on a daily basis it’s a feat if they even open yours — let alone reply.

Luckily, at HubSpot, we know a lot about effective emails. Here are our best tips for introducing yourself over email.

Step 1: Choose a strong subject line

Persuade your recipient to open your email with a compelling subject line. Piquing their curiosity is key; unlike a message from someone whose name they recognize, there’s no guarantee they’ll read yours unless it grabs their attention.

Take a look at the subject lines that have convinced HubSpotters to click:

Networking subject lines:

  • “Beers on me?”
  • “Can I buy you lunch?”
  • “No such thing as a free lunch (until now?)”
  • “Long-time [listener, reader, fan], the first-time emailer”

Sales subject lines:

  • “Do you have an online course for [book]?”
  • “40% growth in 3 months — wow”
  • “Have you considered Twitter ads?”
  • “Hello from [company]”

Job search subject lines:

  • “Curious what working at [company] is like”
  • “Are you looking for a [job title]?”
  • “Saw [company’s] hiring a [job title]”

Step 2: Pick a salutation

It might be one word, but the greeting you opt for makes a difference. If you’re emailing someone in a conservative industry, like finance or government, go with the traditional “Dear.” If you’re emailing someone in a more relaxed industry, such as tech, media, travel, or fashion, use “Hi,” “Hello,” or even “Hey.”

Picking a greeting that they’re familiar with shows you’ve done your research.

As for the second part of the salutation: Their name. I recommend referring to them by first name. These days, that’s the norm across industries.

Steer clear of “[First name] [last name]”, which sounds stilted and robotic, and “Mr./Mrs./Ms. [last name]”, which makes you seem young.

Step 3: Write a strong opening line

The opening line is one of the most important parts of an introduction email. Here’s where you try to establish relevance. If you succeed, you give your recipient a reason to keep reading.

Even though your first instinct is probably saying something about you — such as “My name is X and I’m reaching out because …” — this will quickly cause their eyes to glaze over.

Here are some equally bad first sentences:

  • “We’ve never met, but …”
  • “You don’t know me, but …”
  • “I’m a complete stranger, but …”

Never highlight the fact you’re a stranger — it’s like telling your recipient your email will probably be irrelevant.

Instead, you want to lead with something about them. After all, most people like talking about themselves more than any other topic.

HubSpotters loved these openers:

  • “I noticed you manage one of the software teams at HubSpot.”
  • “Just saw your post at the HubSpot blog about organizing posting calendar in terms of topic clusters.”
  • “Have you ever thought about turning your book into an online course? Or creating an online course based on the same topic as your book?”
  • “I’m inspired by the work you’ve done, not to mention your unique career.”
  • “I’ve never learned so much from a single piece of content.”

Step 4: Explain your reason for reaching out

Now that you’ve stimulated their interest and genuinely complimented them, it’s time to connect the dots.

For example, let’s say you’re hoping to set up a networking meeting so you can learn more about their role (and potentially get a job referral).

If your first line is “You’ve done an impressive job at [company] building [X strategy] and revamping [Y program]”, your second line might be, “I’m considering a career in [person’s field] and would love to buy you coffee so I can learn more about it from an expert.”

Or perhaps your goal is booking a sales call. Your first line might be “I see you host several campus events per year,” and your second could be “I work with companies like Facebook and Google to help promote their college recruitment events.”

The key is making your explanation as relevant to your recipient as possible. You want them to feel special — not like one person on a list of 100 that you’re emailing.

Step 5: Add value

Before you ask for anything, you need to provide value. Thanks to the principle of reciprocity, receiving value makes people want to return the favor.

In Influence: The Psychology of Persuasion, Dr. Robert B. Cialdini describes a study in which an unknowing test subject received a can of soda from the researcher. The soda cost $0.50.

Later, the same researcher asked the participant to buy $5 worth of raffle tickets. Agreement rates were much higher than for participants who didn’t get any soda.

A thoughtful, authentic compliment can definitely provide value, so if you’ve already said something nice in your first few lines, you don’t necessarily need to do more. However, it doesn’t hurt to go a little further. Here are some ideas:

  • Review their book on Amazon, Goodreads, etc., and share the link
  • Recommend an article they might find helpful
  • Suggest a useful app or tool
  • Offer to introduce them to someone who they’d benefit from knowing

Step 6: Make a request

The final piece of the puzzle? Your call-to-action (CTA). Remove as much friction from your ask as possible; if you want them to meet with you, for example, provide a link to your meetings tool so they can instantly see when you’re both available and book a time. Or if you want them to review a post you’ve written, include the attachment so they can immediately read it.

Take a look at these sample lines:

  • “Would you be willing to comment on the LinkedIn post I wrote? It would be great to have your unique perspective (and hopefully get some discussion going).”
  • “If you’re thinking about how Greener could apply the concepts in the guide, I have some ideas I’d love to share. Here’s the link to my calendar: [Link].”
  • “Are you open to answering a few questions about your experience working at HubSpot? Happy to chat over phone or email, whatever’s more convenient.”

Try to strike a balance between polite and confident. Phrases like, “I know you’re busy, but …”“I’d normally never ask, however …”“You probably don’t have time, so …”“It would mean the world to me …” and “I’ll be forever in your debt if …” make you seem desperate — and suggest your recipient would be massively inconveniencing themselves by saying yes.

Because you’re reaching out to a stranger, your request shouldn’t be that excessive or unreasonable. If it is, that’s a completely separate issue. Don’t hurt your chances of a “yes” by sounding insecure.

Step 7: Say “thanks” and sign off

No need to write anything more. The best emails are short, sweet, and concise. After all, extra information or unnecessary details lessen the probability your recipient will actually read the email — they’ll be too put off by its length. You also run the risk of distracting them from what actually matters.

With that in mind, say “thanks,” “thank you,” or “thanks so much”(depending on the size of your request), and add your name.

Follow this formula, and your introduction emails will go over like a charm.

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